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n0spoon — Chased
Published: 2007-10-16 01:30:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 241; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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IWatched silently
As a shadow
dodged across the street
Chased by a chatter of leaves –
No one
Could know
but you.
All
Of the well-meaning
All
Turned,
Curled to
A fetal ball
And bared their fangs.
Chased by a scatter of dreams –
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Comments: 13
a intiruging and thought provoking poem
the imagery, structure and wording are interesting
a unique and intense poem
my fave that you have written so far
I look forward to reading more
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hey thanks very much (especially for noticing the structure, which mattered a lot to me in this poem)
Thanks for the fav & watch, too! 
(i'm planning to come check out your gallery soon -- i'm a bit behind on my "to-do"s, lately, though... soon...)
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you're welcome Issa 
and no worries 
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two rounds of beer... time for scotch!
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Hmm... well, these things are difficult to pin to the board... firstly, it ties to the leaves blowing fleetingly across the road... it's also meant to imply that the "well-meaning all" turn animalistic in their defensiveness as they turn away from their dreams (picture a cornered animal). people get ugly to others when they fail themselves...
or do you mean the period at the end? it's a sort of hanging semi-finality.
clear as mud, right?
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After all I find it hard to comment... It left me speechless.
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I'm sorry for being so incomprehensible. Perhaps I'll manage to find the right words later.
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