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Hebesugar [2012-07-09 04:10:51 +0000 UTC]

Hello dear, I'm writing on behalf critique contest..
first I'll give you my scores from 10:

~ Vision = 6.5
~ Originality = 6.5
~ Technique = 6
~ Impact = 5.5

~ Overall score = 6

Congrats for drawing such a pose, it feels like she's a pro singer..
Also the idea of drawing with light blue on darker parts creating a beautiful composition of blues worked very well, I love how it is blue monochrome..
The shading on her coat is just awesome, and not closing the note's bubble is again a creative thing you've did here..<3

My main suggestions:

- From my experience, I say textures can make a massive change to your drawing, they can simply let it be more beautiful, or even terrible, the dotted pattern you've used, is doing great on her cloth, but try to clean it up from her hair and skin, I think it doesn't fit these areas..
- I didn't figure out what is the moon like shape near her neck, is it an earring?
- Her hair's shading is a bit messy.. add more shades to bottom of the hair and more highlights on top..
- Skirt's shades are not perfect, it seems like they were attached to the coat, maybe fixing the shades here will do the thing, try to keep the dark areas near the folds..
- Her left arm need to be more straight near the wrist, for not changing your beautiful gesture, you can bend it a bit there at elbow..
- Clean your lineart, there are many small lines that made your artwork look like a sketch, cleaning those little unpleasant lines can make your drawing shine more..<3

I have to say again that you have really good technique, and you're a great anime artist..<3
I do like to see what you are uploading next..

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firepianosushi [2012-07-08 23:08:37 +0000 UTC]

Hello and welcome to "Critique with Firepianosushi", here for Feedback Week #FeedbackFrenzy
Here I will attempt to drop some useful constructive criticism on these worthy works

First of all, I must compliment the clean style of the whole drawing. It really gives it a distinctive attitude. The lineart is clean and well done. Also, I like the color choices, and how it's all monochrome. The cell shading and clothing folds are wonderful, and I really like her eyes. I especially like her coat and shirt. Collared shirts can be difficult to draw. The blank background works well to add negative space to the composition, which is good. The piece has such personality. It's great!

The one thing that I have to say is that her left arm looks a little long. Also, her skirt looks like pieces of cloth just stuck there, rather than parts of one whole piece of cloth.

That's all that I have to say about the drawing. It's really beautiful, and the shading style is especially excellent. Just that minor thing with her left arm, and the piece will be a lot better. Keep up the good work

That was "Critique with Firepianosushi". Hope to see you again soon

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huskyxkrystal [2012-06-25 05:58:53 +0000 UTC]

*whisles at luna*

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SamXJing [2012-06-18 17:17:16 +0000 UTC]

That's awesome I like you art style it fits luna's kinda darker side very well

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S3rb4n [2012-06-18 06:49:31 +0000 UTC]

That is effing amazing! It's much better than mine I love it!

Aaand yes, the character belongs to MLP, I just did a humanization

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