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CLAnemone [2017-10-11 10:05:29 +0000 UTC]

Alrighty! I'll begin! 

A monster oc yes!! That's really good! Everything looks ok to! For some reason, I'm not feeling it with the ears though. If you get possessed by a drmonic entity, I doubt you'd actually grow ears on top of your head. The claws however, they're more understandable! 

Now on to the bio;
i don't quite understand how she became a hell hound??? Much less anthromorphic??? How on earth could a demon change you into an entirely different species than what you once were?? 

For her abilities, I feel as though you made her too powerful, with too little weaknesses to even out the balance. For her invisibility, maybe you could say the more she uses it, the weaker she gets? And that she can't use it more than once in a fight, because it would drain her strength too! The longer she fights, her strength and power will decrease. As for the poison, is it curable? Is it like normal snake venom? What sort of symptoms are there? These questions should be answered! 

Now stats! I can imagine how traumatising watching yourself turn into something alienic is, without knowing what to do or what is happening. But I doubt she'd be left with no sanity left after that! You could say she still tries to fight whatever's inside her, and tried to break free! For the strength I don't get what you're trying to say,, but I assume she's really powerful. I left a comment about it previously already! Her speed is really fast, as fast as a car, I suggest tone it down a bit? Maybe,, to how fast a dog runs maybe? And I don't quite get what nerve response means too,, I've never heard of that before. 

For her backstory;
I honestly doubt that a tailor would do something so horrible as to put a shock collar on a child?? I'm pretty sure big clothes companies that abuse their workers don't do that too. Maybe you could say they constantly overworked her? And she was beaten a lot because she would never be able to get the work done! 
Perhaps instead of a demonic entity, you could say to was some type of parasite instead?? That would make it way more creepy! And have a better explanation for her mouths and claws and oddly coloured eye! The parasite might not have the ideal body type to hunt, and so they need a host to feed them! If you do that, that would explain why she wouldn't have any sanity, because she'd just be a mindless killing machine that's constantly hungry! 

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