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hollivay — Lend Me Your Heart
Published: 2008-04-10 19:35:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 1894; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 8
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Description Lend me your hand
So I can pick my bruised body up.

Lend me your eyes
So I can see the good in myself.

Lend me your ears
So I can hear you call for help.

Lend me your mouth
So I can speak words I've never spoken.

Lend me your heart
So I can love.
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Comments: 12

idoublet [2008-04-12 23:24:08 +0000 UTC]

Pie?

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PacifistCND In reply to idoublet [2008-04-13 16:47:56 +0000 UTC]

That's quite enough. Comments, Nick, not pie.

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hollivay In reply to PacifistCND [2008-04-16 01:45:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! Finally!

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hollivay In reply to idoublet [2008-04-13 03:22:32 +0000 UTC]

Um, I don't know what you mean. And why is the mood of your post fear? lol.

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PrincessBojangles [2008-04-11 15:08:44 +0000 UTC]

Lovely hollivay. I also agree with ~alexa-and-ra who agrees with ~penfencer(lovely name!) more verses and this would be wonderful

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hollivay In reply to PrincessBojangles [2008-04-11 17:10:10 +0000 UTC]

Yes, indeed. I'm working on it.

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alex-and-Ra [2008-04-11 04:05:59 +0000 UTC]

The concept is pretty good, in my opinion. But I also agree with Penfencer: try to expand this few verses and this could be much better

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hollivay In reply to alex-and-Ra [2008-04-11 05:45:50 +0000 UTC]

Yeah. I'm definitely going to try.

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Penfencer [2008-04-10 20:54:03 +0000 UTC]

Simplistic, but I like it. I'd like to see this expanded though: I think the concept of using someone else's attributes for one's own purposes has a lot of depth to it, and you could do a lot more with it than just what you have here.

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hollivay In reply to Penfencer [2008-04-11 01:20:28 +0000 UTC]

Definitely. I kind of thought it was a little short but I'll try and add on a few more stanzas.

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awesomedaisy27 [2008-04-10 19:54:07 +0000 UTC]

I support Art In Class and of course, great writing.

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hollivay In reply to awesomedaisy27 [2008-04-10 19:56:40 +0000 UTC]

Me too! And these poems wouldn't be any good without the help of my revisor/editor, awesomedaisy27. She's always there for revising my poems during math.

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