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Published: 2004-04-21 21:22:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 134; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 32
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Description Summer days
in my town,
and that way
time slowed down-

Warm showers-
We were young.
Those summers...
when our lives had just begun.

Summer nights
at the park-
Our flashlights
in the dark-

River beds
with their mist-
I was lead
to your fresh, evoking kiss.

Summer days,
very hot-
always stayed
the same plots-

Lazy thoughts,
humid air,
regattas...
walking from the county fair.

Summer nights,
gang of friends,
hang-out site:
never ends.

Brilliant stars,
cricket's song
never far-
Those warm nights lasted so long.

Loving ways,
Sparce in fights...
Summer days.
Summer nights.
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Comments: 16

Guitar-Dude [2004-04-23 23:50:06 +0000 UTC]

Yea i don't like what they did to you about your category but DA has been around for a while now and they need to start whipping everything into shape because it used to be oh so un-organized it wasn't funny. nice poem ....but after hearing about the story about the pic just makes the picture funnier.

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Balletbabymari In reply to Guitar-Dude [2004-04-23 23:52:08 +0000 UTC]

Yayay. thank you for the COMMENT! *comment nazi praises comment bitch*

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Guitar-Dude In reply to Balletbabymari [2004-04-24 01:29:16 +0000 UTC]

Now your the Comment Nazi and i'm a bitch ( sorry for anyone that is german in here i'm deaply sorry) anyways i can see the Nazi part but i called you the bitch not myself lol

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Gods-Jester [2004-04-23 19:59:44 +0000 UTC]

Very well done!! :smile: I think you attempted a completely different approach from the rest of your work and pulled it off. The gramatical softness was moreso a complement to your piece as it felt more laid back. I would categorize it as "feel-good" because I read it and couldn't help but smile. It just felt warm and slightly simple and lazy in that nice kinda way. It felt good, and that always qualifies as amazing poetry.

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Balletbabymari In reply to Gods-Jester [2004-04-23 21:25:36 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much.

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Rolling14reader [2004-04-23 17:00:51 +0000 UTC]

I love the wistful and carefree approach with the listing of this poetry. Makes you want to take a moment and aydream... kind of a good effect.

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Balletbabymari In reply to Rolling14reader [2004-04-23 21:36:12 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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the-sohi [2004-04-22 17:49:57 +0000 UTC]

very steady, woud. make a great indie tyle song! i duno why but it reminded me of babckbeat by oasis

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Balletbabymari In reply to the-sohi [2004-04-22 23:39:03 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. hmm... never heard of oasis.

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the-sohi In reply to Balletbabymari [2004-04-23 07:51:56 +0000 UTC]

really? lady you NEED to listen to them!! go buy album. NOW!

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Balletbabymari In reply to the-sohi [2004-04-23 21:36:58 +0000 UTC]

Yes, sir.

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the-sohi In reply to Balletbabymari [2004-04-24 12:48:50 +0000 UTC]

damn str8. "yes sir, I wont cross ya again boos sohi, please don't pull my eyes out boss sohi" lol I like the sound of that. umm yeh. me in strange odd mood.

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Cleveryetdull [2004-04-22 12:49:26 +0000 UTC]

I like the short style; Again, laid back, I like it

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Balletbabymari In reply to Cleveryetdull [2004-04-22 23:39:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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frankienexus [2004-04-21 22:22:43 +0000 UTC]

very dreamy and laidback, and very nice, about the catorgeries i dont know its difficult. if i had to really be pushed i would say for all intents and purposes this is a romantic poem cause tis about a romantic good memory.. but sigh its difficult

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Balletbabymari In reply to frankienexus [2004-04-21 22:37:13 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. Thank you especially for the advice about categoration. (Damn DA!!)

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