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"Sam C."
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Thanks for your lovely comment. It's so flattering coming from you.
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Your words are strong and simply beautiful. It's a pleasure reading your poems.
You are very talented.
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I believe my response verbatim was "woahh."
Sorry it took me so long to realize.
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So, I finally got a list up and running for the Link of the Night. If you're not on it (as in, don't get this message, and you want to), shoot me a note, or leave a message or just somehow let me know. Same goes for the instance that you want off the list - please let me know.
Happiness , by .
The Interview , by .
Rusting Bridges of Suburbia , by .
So, I did some peruzing, and earthed up these three pieces.
Happiness is beautiful in its own simplicity, and has a subtle kick to it that I find lacking in a lot of reading these days.
The Interview is an interesting little for-the-stage piece that I found myself cracking up over, all over the place. There's some great humor and dialogue going on here, as well as some great subtle toss-ins for the actors to experiment with. Something I would love to see performed.
While Rusting Bridges of Suburbia might be a little ho-hum subject-wise, the rhythm and control of meter that ~ honestbrutality has accomplished here is impeccable. It takes a lot of practice and a lot of control of vocabulary to get a good rhythm in a slam piece these days, and it's done beautifully here.
Get writing, fuckos. *jesusbite
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So, after a long undue abscence, the Link of the Night returns. Yeah. Enjoy it while it lasts.
After looking through some of the new submissions, I couldn't find anything worthy, so I went back to my old bookmarks and looked through them, trying to find which could stand the test of time.
The pieces I chose were stunning, and still are. They could use some polish, a little TLC, but in their own right, they're golden (albiet buried under some layers of dust).
Thieves Army - Final by is a stunning (little) epic.
Dear Fellow Sagittarian by just grooves along to its own little melody.
Here is to a (triumphant?) return!
Much love, huggings, kissings, and oral sex from your pal, .
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Just thinking about you and how much I miss talking to you.
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Link of the Night!
In the fashion of Big Poppa E, I give you ~punkiebear , blasting out an anthem for all the videogamers, D&Ders, Jedis, Evil Deadites, and artists --- the nerds.
Love, your lovely oral-sex provider, ~ jesusbite .
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Link of the Night! While JB's away, I'm taking over for him (with permission). Even though it's made DTF, this is simply too amazing to read just once. See what I'm talking about and check it out!
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Link of the Night! Just for you special folks (all fucking 80 of you), Ive got the most fast-paced thing I could dig up from my archives, to suit my fast-paced lifestyle as of lately.
Hey, even the words are good. Read, and you will know what I mean.
As always, random loving, fucking and sucking from your friend, ~jesusbite .
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Link of the Night ! I figured you needed some more good reading material, so I went digging through my list and picked out the finest imagery, crispest words and some of the best storytelling that I could find. I love poetry that people can get jealous of. This is some of it.
And as always, random lovings, soddings and fuckings from your bud, ~ jesusbite . You can have your choice of your sexual deviation.
And as a bonus, the Poet of the Night. ~agraphia
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you're right, ~norman2 is a freggin' genius!!
He's on the list.
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were you joking about +jsenn or pointing out a grave error in my not having her already on the list 
thanks for the comment on blemish, I don't know what to think of it myself. I like it, but that's due to understanding what its about...to someone who takes a fleeting look--even for a bit--they might not see what its about.
Anyway, its comparing the death at an old cemetary (necropolis is as old as they come) --thus pointing out lots of people have cried there...lots of pain... and compare it to plastic bags or pollution against mother nature. So ''she cries'' is mother nature crying at the end.
its pretty damn hard to pull that off with 22 mandatory syllables and that's the last cinquain im gonna even bother with currently.
hahaha, damn you're a funny dude (in that--I like you and hope you tremendous good fortune in life--sort of way).
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was just reading 'Smilers' again, man--that's a great piece.
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I agree with you on 'oncogenes', but the piece is intended (at least on some level) to explore intellectual property. Obviously my tendency toward abstraction shot that theme all to hell, since it isn't clear from reading it what it's supposed to be about.
I liked that deviation from the theme in the sixth stanza. Of course, with the theme not being accessible, I guess that preference is all mine.
Thanks for reading and commenting - you've made me think about some choices I made while writing. Maybe a revision is necessary.
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What happened to #literature? Good question! I thought I had everything set up to automatically log me in . . . I guess it needs my intervention after all. Oh well, I'll look into that little glitch and hopefully see you around there.
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I don't make a habit out of pimping but you gotsta take a look here Are you hungry by ~citizenerased
For if you need inspiration or a shot of SOC I'm sure you'll enjoy it.
Wunderbra 'scuse Wunderbar ... really ...
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thanks for taking time to comment and the suggestions!
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YO!
check out my journal if u get a chance, I'm making a list of people who deserve the title (well...) of "poet". Basically, I'm making a list of people who care about their works and am trying to build a tighter-knit community among them (us).
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Thanks for the comments on Thirty Years , amigo.
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Long story ...
It's just that some people prefer ignorance, they think it's bliss.
In my book I would put it this way:
As long as there are boundaries
we got something to overlook
As long as there are distances
We got something to overcome
As long as there is a next step
We have something to look forward to
Victories hollow out faster
than the memory of defeat ...
I live in the middle of Holland in a small town called IJsselstein.
So you like beer?
Thanks for the support and take care.
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You're a wonderful person- you know that, right?
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You always take the bad out of my life with a few simple words.
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lol dident awnser half ur question
, clapham was cool , shame about matt pukin in that girls hair lol , you know what hes like after a couple of lemonades hehe , it was one of those days you wish you had ur camera with you , oh well i got some nice little projects cumin up this summer , all volenteer work ofcorse but hey! i enjoy it hehe
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lol it wasent me that puked in her hair it was matt lol , i gota go to north west kent on wednesday...
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Thanks for the great comments on "static" and "Le masque du theatre".
With Static, as with my other pieces, the structure guides the reader along the flow to read it as I intended it to be read. All of my poems are designed to be read aloud- flow is a very important factor to me. *smile* as for the two sections, section one ends on the phrase "completes the movement." by ending it there, it adds finality to the phrase.. then you take a breath and go on to the next section...
As for "Masque", almost all of my rhyming in all of my poems is purely unintential, and is a product of my particular emphasis on flow. The exception to this is "Nocturn", which is the only structured rhyming piece I have written to date. "Insomnia" is also a structured rhyming poem, but the structure was not my own, and was instead filked from a faerie tale.. I am always happy when I get a good internal rhythm, as in "artifice..suffice". The other alliteration, however is planned and something that I love to play around with, such as in "Firefly" and "Moonlit reflections".
Thanks again for the great comments.. if you have any other questions, feel free to ask!
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I feel like a jerk!
I want to thank you for all of your wonderful comments, man. It means alot to me when someone understand what I write and where i'm coming from. Your suggestions were awesome, and your comments even better!
Thank you soo much for taking the time to read so many of my submissions. It means an aweful lot to me!
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yeah, i know. i had a similar experience w/ him. don't let his arrogance get to ya.
i am doing quite well, actually. in a few hours i'm double dating with my friend and her boyfriend and we're all going to see 'finding nemo' at the movies, heh.
it's hot outside. like 90 degrees.
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i formerly wrote:
"what i will offer is that this piece suffers from uncultured-line break syndrome. It really distorts the rhythm, and suggests to me that the creator lacks the abi9lity to carve his own rhythm with any understanding of the higher elements of poetry.. a far cry from being the best poet in the word.
the second affliction of this is it's just been diagnosed with "over-use of modifier-syndrome"
"the swirling rings of reality that curled
and curtailed around sullen blonde blends."
the modifiers here are really out of place, and once more suggests you lack the subtley to build upon this.
Though poets such as wordsworth and tenyson ae renound for using modifiers in their poetry, they did it with a rare genius. Instead this impares rhythm, and content.
all in all, i see you have potential. You have a good internal rhythm, and a fair vocabulary. However, you need a kick up the arse. it appears you are content with your ability, and as it is, it's far from good... though better than many here.
you seem to leave out cliche`s which is a good thing, but till you can build upon the mentioned.. and understand their significance.. you'll not progress."
that's the best non-critique i've ever seen in my life.
get over it. i don't consider myself to be a good poet. i also don't consider myself to be a poor one.
you're poetry is far from cultured. Now, mature a little. there's no way you are going to convince me otherwise, unless you show me a poem i deem worthy of the title "good poet". As you won't convince me otherwise, you can either continue to squabble with me, or actually try to prove me wrong.
daniel
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hahahaha
i study philosophy what does that have to do with me commenting on poetry?
once again, you are not, in my eyes, what i would call an able poet.
what gives me the right to say this? My own perspective. Now i tihnk i'm more qualified on the matter, because if you were, you wouldn't incorporate the instruments i originally critiqued you on.
get over it. you won't develop till you can realise reality.
daniel
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at the moment, yes. you are a shit poet.
but a young one, with room for improvement
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haha, i meant:
better to be a shit poet with alot of potential, than a mediocre poet with none
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"all in all, i see you have potential. You have a good internal rhythm, and a fair vocabulary"
i hope you were being melodramtic earlier.
i've seen poets a lot worse, a lot older, with a lot less potential. potential is everything. you can learn. better to be a mediocre poet without potential, than a shit poet with a lot of potential.
thik it over
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