Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2016-05-21 15:54:22 +0000 UTC]

Ha ha ha, a night elf curse shall be upon you. From this day forward you will be a successful and prolific writer!
This will teach you ot to anger the gods

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2015-10-02 16:57:30 +0000 UTC]

Sure, I'll take a look.

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Pedigri In reply to AdrianMarkGillespie [2015-09-27 20:05:35 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much

As for the calibration problem I amped up the gamma and was able to see details in the upper right corner. I'll see how this setting will work out.

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2015-08-11 23:43:11 +0000 UTC]

I see. Well, I hope you get it fixed soon. Perhaps you'll get to write more new material.
I finally got to edit my short story which was 27th among 50 short stories and could be higher, because I exceeded the character limit and had to cut lrge chunks of it and replace it with anti-climactic summaries, which didn't work well. It was also one where I still used lengthy sentences and too much "simultaneous" verbs, the ones with -ing (he ate while watching TV).

See you until then.

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TEANO In reply to Pedigri [2015-08-14 16:58:34 +0000 UTC]

*Teanonator voice* "I'm back."

I did write some more pages for Sunder, actually. There's a fun part coming up. 

Eh, that's why I don't join contests. Having to work by pre-set guidelines is a useful writing exercise, I guess, and I know you can't organize a contest without them, but I think having total freedom produces the best (and most unique) work. Limitations make the submission feel less worthwhile and less representative imo, which kinda defeats the purpose on getting people to judge it. But that's just my opinion. I do remember taking part in tournaments on the ol' RPG boards where your characters had to fight and the outcome was decided by who was the better writer though. That was a lot of fun. Do you have the link (to the original story)?

Did they want you to write 'He ate. He also watched tv.' instead? If so, ignore those people! Eating while watching tv rocks!

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2015-08-14 19:39:09 +0000 UTC]

The thing is it wouldn't be that easy to manage. Each one had the possibility to submit three works (not all did though) and each work could be 35000 characters long. People had to read through them all to rate them.
The main problem was that too much words were used up for explaining the sci-fi world/setting. It was also rich in dialogue I felt I needed to include to get the protagonists' unusual relationship across.

But this kind of place even despite it's flaws is something amazing. One can only imagine how it would be received without them.
I don't complain, because without the contest I would've probably never written it.

Yeah, the link's not a problem, but it's in Polish. I do hope to polish it in Polish and then translate it, because feedback between contests tends to be unreliable there. Plus, it grew to 30 pages, so unless I submit it in parts I don't see how someone will find the time to read through it. At least not in one sitting. If I get to translate it, I will post it here though.

More or less. They wanted me to do it with actions where I just knew they had to be done simultaneously. The problem is that in some contexts few words were equally suited to convey what I meant. For example I wanted an action to be performed while the protag started running, not when they ran.

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TEANO In reply to Pedigri [2015-08-14 20:47:26 +0000 UTC]

'Polish it in Polish' - you've been sitting on that one for years, haven't you? x')

I see. I assumed it was a DeviantArt contest.

My little word of advice is very simple: be sure that it happens at the same time. If you write 'he started running and tripped over a rock' it makes sense, if you write 'as he started running he tripped over a rock' it makes much less sense. Not sure if that's helpful at all, but the main thing I'm trying to say is that sometimes people get so caught up in sentence structure the events they're trying to describe become second to the sentence itself... while actually the sentence should be serving the events. I hope that makes sense.

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2015-08-14 21:46:55 +0000 UTC]

Yes and nopesu.
This is a relatively new work. It's not an incarnation of the one I posted here once (this one started going well. I wrote over 80 notebook pages and accidentally wrote and end-part scene which gave the whole thing a structure and a direction. I'm also posting chapters/parts in my writing group and their reception is okay). BUT I did stall for months before I got to editing it. This is a thing I admire in you - thet you are able to get to editing right away. I'm haunted by this feeling that I won't be able to make it better, because if I could, I would've written it better the first time. And it's even if I get constructive feedback. Though I managed to discipline myself into editing it in the last two days. The end result is still not perfect, but I guess it's better than it was before.

Yes, I'm aware of that nuance. I accidentally managed to pull off a clusterfawk like this when I wrote that he felt her body hit against his chest while she was still in the air

I know, I know that the content is more important than the form, but I've got this annoying habit that I often can't continue editing unless I'm satisfied with the edit I made to the previous sentence/part. I edit in a linear fashion unless I feel inspired and fear that I'll lose it if I'll wait till tomorrorw with editing the rest.

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TEANO In reply to Pedigri [2015-08-17 17:54:12 +0000 UTC]

The only time editing is difficult for me is if it's a huge chunk of text or if I have to make really extensive edits. To make all these relatively small changes when you're helping to point out problems with the text really isn't so hard at all, especially because you often give suggestions on how to fix it etc. 

Hmm, I can't stand leaving things everyone will notice, like unfinished sentences (or accidental gender swaps ) but the bigger issues I can ignore for a while. I just have this list of things I need to fix or pay attention to when I do the eventual rewrite, one is changing the number of juggernaughts Irewyth sunk to one, another is making sure characters' manner of speech is consistent, and so on and so forth. I know I'll get around to it at some point because I have this list, so I can continue with a 'clear conscience.' Putting too much time into the editing will otherwise slow down your progress too much - some even advocate not stopping to edit before you've finished writing, but since I upload this stuff for people to read, of course I can't follow that advice

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2015-05-17 09:52:40 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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Pedigri In reply to LittleLightFromDark [2015-02-18 10:32:19 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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Pedigri In reply to BleedingProphecies [2015-02-14 17:15:08 +0000 UTC]

You are most welcome

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Pedigri In reply to servity [2015-02-13 09:08:17 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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Pedigri In reply to thebalefulprimal [2015-02-08 00:29:11 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.
And thanks for stopping by

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Pedigri In reply to Lily-Lucid [2014-09-08 08:30:50 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.
Thanks for being open to feedback. That's not always the case, especially with people who'd rather push for publishing their work as it is instead of contemplating the feedback, because it hurts their ego or it seems like too much work. Glad you don't seem like one of those people.

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Lily-Lucid In reply to Pedigri [2014-09-08 14:23:44 +0000 UTC]

I mean, yeah, I don't want to rush and publish something that isn't good and people are gonna get annoyed reading.

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2014-08-25 10:16:07 +0000 UTC]

No problem. See you after the exam

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2014-05-23 20:19:31 +0000 UTC]

I see. No problem.

Wow, that must've taken confidence in your work.
What kind of changes were those? Grammatical ones or story-related?

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TEANO In reply to Pedigri [2014-05-23 21:08:37 +0000 UTC]

Confidence is the key to success He told me 'it's a nice text', so that's nice. Didn't get as much feedback as I wanted from my colleagues though, but oh well. Common edits, mostly fixing of unnatural sounding sentences, but also, and most notably, some dialogue changes: Irewyth tells a little bit more about her past in Dalaran, about her escape and Arthas' attack, she further explains her reasoning for thinking why humans can't forge a proper legacy. It's a driving force behind her character so I felt I had to explain it a little more thoroughly. The better I get at English, the more I seem to notice those. Which is a good thing, don't get me wrong.

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2014-05-24 08:54:41 +0000 UTC]

Well, your colleagues either kept taste-based opinions to themselves or didn't really know much about creative writing, so...

Hmm, sounds like an interesting change, but I'll have to see if it didn't prolong her dialogue too much. That would be weird if she talked for 30 minutes of real time or if it took these 30 minutes for someone to join the party so they can set off

I know full well that the more words and sentence structures you know, the more you can express in this language.

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TEANO In reply to Pedigri [2014-08-27 17:46:36 +0000 UTC]

So... was it too much?

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2014-08-27 18:15:44 +0000 UTC]

Oh, you edited it? I didn't know. I'll get to it a bit later.

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TEANO In reply to Pedigri [2014-08-27 18:52:18 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, just a bit of extra dialogue on her past. 

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2013-09-05 20:03:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, man. Good advice. Luckily it turned out to be just a reaaally late payment.
But I guess the job I recently quit was a scam in of itself. I may have felt it, so I didn't invest much work in it.

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TEANO In reply to Pedigri [2013-09-05 20:17:01 +0000 UTC]

No problem, if there's anything that ticks me of more than being treated unfairly it's my friends / family being treated unfairly.

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Pedigri In reply to Bayra [2013-07-30 13:59:13 +0000 UTC]

I've returned here for good only a couple of months back, I think.

How's life been for you? I hope all's well.

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Bayra In reply to Pedigri [2013-08-01 14:14:12 +0000 UTC]

yep, i'm great ^^, hope you too

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2013-07-24 12:31:25 +0000 UTC]

Done. Changes sound good. Something new for me to check?

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TEANO In reply to Pedigri [2013-07-24 13:17:35 +0000 UTC]

Not yet, if everything goes well I will have a new part uploaded today however. Without giving away too much, it's a moment I've been building up to for a very long time, an epic duel, so I'm pretty stoked about it. 

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Pedigri In reply to TEANO [2013-07-24 13:52:19 +0000 UTC]

I see, but I meant the revision of the old chapter

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TEANO In reply to Pedigri [2013-07-24 14:08:47 +0000 UTC]

I'll probably get around to editing that after I've uploaded the new part. I haven't revised anything past Shattered (1) yet. 

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